I would maybe add some other show references, like a blood slide, or a knife. Also, I would make the blood splats around the box dark red instead of white, it kinda suggests it is something other than blood....haha.
spacemonkeydr said: I would maybe add some other show references, like a blood slide, or a knife. Also, I would make the blood splats around the box dark red instead of white, it kinda suggests it is something other than blood....haha.
hey everyone now and then spills some milk...next time use Dexter's wrap and make those spills a thing of the past!
spacemonkeydr said: I would maybe add some other show references, like a blood slide, or a knife. Also, I would make the blood splats around the box dark red instead of white, it kinda suggests it is something other than blood....haha.
Haha. Appreciate the feedback guys! I'll play with the branding and give the splats some more attention (good call @spacemonkeydr)
I changed "Dexter" to "Morgan's" and got rid of "Plastic Wrap" in favor of "Kling Wrap" ('Kling' is the closest approximation to 'killing' without explicitly saying it). The subtitle reads "Clear Kill Wrap | Envoltura de Matar Transparente." I might need a little help with the Spanish subtitle, not sure if it translates :)
Please let me know if you have any final thoughts, but I think this is submission ready.
I am a fan of the changes. Morgan's reads better and sounds more like a company. The white to red splatter changes and gives it more of the feel that he is in the act of killing and not in the act of... well you know. I am late to the Dexter scene and am only a season and a half in.(thanks netflix for taking it off while I was watching) so I don't own a Dexter shirt. I would totally buy this.
Dexter looks better on the packaging it's not as cramped on the red flag as Morgan's appears to be.
Plastic wrap works better as a generic name for Glad's product.
The end with the eye is kind of congested. Perhaps moving the eye up away from the splatter? I think the contrasting red next to one another (in the original) help a lot.
hey everyone now and then spills some milk...next time use Dexter's wrap and make those spills a thing of the past!
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Haha. Appreciate the feedback guys! I'll play with the branding and give the splats some more attention (good call @spacemonkeydr)
Still thinking through different word play. Open to suggestions. Thanks!
I like the 2nd version better then the first. Might be nice to see a bit more of his face.
"Morgan's" is better than "Dexter".
How about "Just Slice Off What You Need" as a tag line? - just a suggestion.
If you print it, they will buy...
I changed "Dexter" to "Morgan's" and got rid of "Plastic Wrap" in favor of "Kling Wrap" ('Kling' is the closest approximation to 'killing' without explicitly saying it). The subtitle reads "Clear Kill Wrap | Envoltura de Matar Transparente." I might need a little help with the Spanish subtitle, not sure if it translates :)
Please let me know if you have any final thoughts, but I think this is submission ready.
Thanks Guys!!
I'd say go with cling and you still have the verbal sound of killing.
Plastic wrap works better as a generic name for Glad's product.
The end with the eye is kind of congested. Perhaps moving the eye up away from the splatter? I think the contrasting red next to one another (in the original) help a lot.