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Hey there! I'm a long time Facebook TeeFury fan, and I decided to try my hand at making a shirt. FINALLY. Haha!

So, my idea is a MashedPotato of Jones soda and Indiana Jones. Here is what I've made so far — enough to get the concept across, though FAR from finished. What do you think?

http://f.cl.ly/items/3N272A1W3S2u2H0f1Q2l/doctor%20jones%20soda%20idea1.png

Things I specifically want help on:
-- What should the picture be? His dog? The idol from the first film? The Grail? What do you want it to be?
-- The twisty cap smurfs. For some reason I can't get it to look natural (my biggest problem being the 6 color limit)
-- Would you buy this shirt? If no, why?
-- Any design improvements whatsoever, be it to the concept or the execution.


Please tell me ANYTHING that comes to mind about the design, good or bad. I want this baby picked, so I want as much critique as possible.

Thanks!
chirmer~

EDIT: Whoaaa how do I get the image to post?!
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    152 weeks ago
    Incorporate a snake in there somewhere, maybe? ... lol I mean, Jones hates snakes.

    And yes, I'd buy the shirt. Just tweak it a bit. I'm not a designer so I have no real expert advise other than saying that right now it looks sorta plain... but a GREAT idea that I'd love to see improved.
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    152 weeks ago
    Thanks for the comment! :D

    Yeah, this is pretty much the design at its bare bones, haha. I am tweaking like crazy and the bottle is only halfway done, but I like where it's headed!

    I was thinking of adding his "lucky charm", his lighter (that his dad set fire to the castle room with), but I don't want it to get cluttered... I will add different things and see how they look :D

    Thanks for the feedback! I'll keep posting WIP shots as it progresses :)

    Also, anyone know how to get the image to show up? I did the tag thing and it didn't seem to work... D:
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    152 weeks ago
    The fedora itself does seem a bit too flat, and looks far more like an Australian Akubra hat than the original Indiana Jones fedora. The brim is far too large! I think that if you made the hat looked like it "floated" in the air behind the soda, giving it a bit of an angle. Here's a reference picture of an AB fedora, modelled very accurately after the screen used fedoras. http://www.kennydrew.com/Indylounge/gts/IMG_0686.jpg

    The chilled monkey brain aspect has been done before, so a small suggestion is to use something like, a date? (the fruit, that is, a reference from Raiders).
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    152 weeks ago
    I like the concept! It looks good so far, can't wait to see it as you add more detail. Sounds like you have some good ideas to play around with :)
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    152 weeks ago
    @Railok yeah, I used my own fedora I got from the Indiana Jones show in Orlando as my reference XD And afterwards I realized it's not the same type of fedora at all :( So that is on the list to change! Thanks for reminding me!

    I was stuck between the monkey brain and dates!!! haha! But I couldn't come up with a good name for the flavor except "Not-Poisoned" :( So I also could use suggestions for that ;D

    Surfercat, thanks for the comment! and LOL your pic is awesome XD
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    152 weeks ago
    OK let's see if this works~

    WIP 1

    Here is the WIP I failed to post above X(
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    152 weeks ago
    chirmer said: @Railok yeah, I used my own fedora I got from the Indiana Jones show in Orlando as my reference XD And afterwards I realized it's not the same type of fedora at all :( So that is on the list to change! Thanks for reminding me!


    I was stuck between the monkey brain and dates!!! haha! But I couldn't come up with a good name for the flavor except "Not-Poisoned" :( So I also could use suggestions for that ;D


    Surfercat, thanks for the comment! and LOL your pic is awesome XD


    Thanks! :D It's really funny that you should comment on it in this thread because the cat I used for the model is my cat Indy, named after Indiana Jones! I think it bodes well for this design's success :P
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    151 weeks ago
    Ok I completely reworked this design! Whatd'ya think?

    doctor%20jones%20soda%20better1.png
    MockupShirtDrJonesSoda.png

    Lemme know your thoughts! :D
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    151 weeks ago
    Also, thanks Chuffy for the shirt! ;D
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    151 weeks ago
    I liked the bottle/fedora design. The new direction isn't bad, but I think you could merge the two for the best result.
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    151 weeks ago
    I've got to say, I preferred the first design. The idol isn't bad but I really love Indy's hat and the soda bottle, they're both such iconic symbols that I think that design really had a lot going for it.

    I agree, it would be cool to work the idol into the original design, maybe even if you put that label from the second design onto the bottle in the first.
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    150 weeks ago
    ^^ Yes! That's what I was thinking too.
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    150 weeks ago
    Yeah, I woke up this morning and thought the same thing XD once I get back to my computer I'll get another WIP posted :D

    Thanks so much for the feedback, dudes! You rock :)
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    150 weeks ago
    One suggestion is that if you're going to use that font, you might be able to drop the "Dr." and have a cleaner label design. With the fedora and the font, and the idol graphic, you've got the reference nailed down.
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    150 weeks ago
    Yeah, totally agree. I think the design is strong enough to drop the "Dr."


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